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FAX
09-24-2011, 05:01 PM
Hi, Planeteers. This is FAX.

I need some help. I have a meeting with BMI on Monday. We're working in the studio today and realized we're a song short.

I need a good hook (one that hasn't been used in the past by anybody else). Please post your song ideas on this here thread thing. I'll check back later and, if I can use the hook and get the song written, I shall give you co-writer credit (we'll work out the details via the PM deal).

Thank you in advance.

FAX

PS: No songs about super large vaginas, please. I already have quite a few of those.

Disclaimers: Sorry if repost.

Der Flöprer
09-24-2011, 05:05 PM
Can I get a genre?

FAX
09-24-2011, 05:07 PM
Can I get a genre?

Doesn't really matter, Mr. Mr. Flopnuts.

Ideally, it would be a Southern Rock type of song featuring loud, fast Les Paul guitars. I feel the need for speed.

FAX

Der Flöprer
09-24-2011, 05:08 PM
Let it Go. You could write a whole song about a litany of things around those 3 little words.

FAX
09-24-2011, 05:09 PM
Oh ... and it would be sincerely appreciated if our fabulously talented mods could keep this in the main lounge for today ... my thread things are typically ignored and die quickly, but I fear this one would be ignored even more than usual if it wound up in the media sub-forum.

Just for today. We're on a deadline.

FAX

Der Flöprer
09-24-2011, 05:11 PM
Help me out if you would Mr. FAX. I know the hook is pretty much the thesis of the song. Are you looking for a chorus, the whole song to be written, or just an idea of what to write about.

FAX
09-24-2011, 05:11 PM
Let it Go. You could write a whole song about a litany of things around those 3 little words.

It's been used, Mr. Mr. Flopnuts.

Tim McGraw, Zac Brown Band, Elesia (sp?) Cole, etc.

The hook/title needs to be new/unused.

Good idea, though. Very good ... and you're right.

FAX

FAX
09-24-2011, 05:12 PM
Help me out if you would Mr. FAX. I know the hook is pretty much the thesis of the song. Are you looking for a chorus, the whole song to be written, or just an idea of what to write about.

Just the hook or title ... either/or.

I can take it from there.

FAX

FAX
09-24-2011, 05:15 PM
Help me out if you would Mr. FAX. I know the hook is pretty much the thesis of the song. Are you looking for a chorus, the whole song to be written, or just an idea of what to write about.

Let me unpack my previous response a little, Mr. Mr. Flopnuts. We're just busy here and I don't mean to be ... short.

I typically write from the hook. In other words, the various entendres that emerge from thinking about the hook lead me to the chorus which, in turn, allows me to build the supporting verses and bridge.

When I have a song idea, it almost always starts with a hook or title and flows from there.

FAX

Gadzooks
09-24-2011, 05:15 PM
Oops, I did it again.

Der Flöprer
09-24-2011, 05:16 PM
It's hard trying to think of something that's never been sung about. Dirty shoes. There's one. I'll keep thinking.

FAX
09-24-2011, 05:18 PM
One more thing before I have to bail for awhile ...

Any ideas are welcome.

Ideally, though, the hook would be a common phrase that is popular-ish. An example might be, "That's How I Roll" ... which, of course, has already been used. But it's a phrase that is in common usage and, therefore, easy for music business types to grok.

FAX

LTL
09-24-2011, 05:18 PM
Sure it's probably been done in some way shape or form, but I will go with my mood.

I'm tired of living a lie

Kyle DeLexus
09-24-2011, 05:21 PM
Come at me, bro!

Der Flöprer
09-24-2011, 05:21 PM
Let me unpack my previous response a little, Mr. Mr. Flopnuts. We're just busy here and I don't mean to be ... short.

I typically write from the hook. In other words, the various entendres that emerge from thinking about the hook lead me to the chorus which, in turn, allows me to build the supporting verses and bridge.

When I have a song idea, it almost always starts with a hook or title and flows from there.

FAX

No offense taken. This is fun. I'll keep trying to think of something. Now I'm trying to incorporate timeshare into this thing. "Your love is like timeshare. Rarely available. Never too stable. Always pitching heat, making me feel like I'm able."

Maybe i should just stop...

KurtCobain
09-24-2011, 05:22 PM
I have a few

"She's got a muffin top
She's so huge(so huge)
When you see with no clothes on
It will make you puke(puke)

But..

She sucks a mean dick(mean dick)
All night long
But when you see this bitch naked
It's all too wrong!

She sucks a mean dick(mean dick)
And she sucks it all around
But when she takes off her shirt
You say bitch Lose some pounds!"

FAX
09-24-2011, 05:23 PM
I have a few

"She's got a muffin top
She's so huge(so huge)
When you see with no clothes on
It will make you puke(puke)

But..

She sucks a mean dick(mean dick)
All night long
But when you see this bitch naked
It's all too wrong!

She sucks a mean dick(mean dick)
And she sucks it all around
But when she takes off her shirt
You say bitch Lose some pounds!"

I always enjoy a good love ballad.

FAX

angelo
09-24-2011, 05:23 PM
Years ago when I fancied my self a bad poet.
I wrote a little one called
"Tornado Woman".
About a destructive relationship and the mess it left behind.
Kind of fitting with what has happened this last year.

Ang

FAX
09-24-2011, 05:23 PM
No offense taken. This is fun. I'll keep trying to think of something. Now I'm trying to incorporate timeshare into this thing. "Your love is like timeshare. Rarely available. Never too stable. Always pitching heat, making me feel like I'm able."

Maybe i should just stop...

No, man. You're doing great.

Gotta run.

Thanks again, guys.

FAX

Der Flöprer
09-24-2011, 05:24 PM
One more thing before I have to bail for awhile ...

Any ideas are welcome.

Ideally, though, the hook would be a common phrase that is popular-ish. An example might be, "That's How I Roll" ... which, of course, has already been used. But it's a phrase that is in common usage and, therefore, easy for music business types to grok.

FAX

Pitching heat.

KurtCobain
09-24-2011, 05:24 PM
One more thing before I have to bail for awhile ...

Any ideas are welcome.

Ideally, though, the hook would be a common phrase that is popular-ish. An example might be, "That's How I Roll" ... which, of course, has already been used. But it's a phrase that is in common usage and, therefore, easy for music business types to grok.

FAX

(pump your fist in the air with you index and middle fingers extended to make a 'peace sign')

"Throw yo peace up! Throw your piece up!

Yeah, Yeah, Nigga, Throw Yo MotherFuckin Peace Up!"

Gadzooks
09-24-2011, 05:25 PM
There isn't a song aboot NTTAWT:
"T" rhymes with pee, tree, three, be, bee, me, tea, we, key, he, she, fee, knee

Lots of options there.

stonedstooge
09-24-2011, 05:25 PM
Sometimes doing the right thing, is not the right thing to do

KurtCobain
09-24-2011, 05:27 PM
There isn't a song aboot NTTAWT:
"T" rhymes with pee, tree, three, be, bee, me, tea, we, key, he, she, fee, knee

Lots of options there.

NWTTAWT
She makes me wanna pee
while im smoking on trees!

NWTTAWT
I wanted more than one,
Yeah I wanted three!
But this stupid as cunt,
She charges a huge fee!

Gadzooks
09-24-2011, 05:28 PM
"Just because they're doing it wrong shouldn't keep you from doing it right."
(Saw it in a porno and the man who quoted it said he saw it in a bathroom stall)
It's a phrase I use my day to day life.

KurtCobain
09-24-2011, 05:30 PM
"We slap hoes! Yall know!
We roll hard! We fuck Lard!

Get it!
Get it!
Get it!
Get it!
Get it!
Get it!"

Gadzooks
09-24-2011, 05:33 PM
NTTAWT
She makes me wanna pee
while im smoking on trees!

NTTAWT
I wanted more than one,
Yeah I wanted three!
But this stupid as ****,
She charges a huge fee!

LMAO.
Great hard core/ punk tune.
E/G/C

blaise
09-24-2011, 05:33 PM
Not safe for work.

ouspenskii
09-24-2011, 05:33 PM
Sometimes
I see a light shine
In my mind
I feel the world is mine

HonestChieffan
09-24-2011, 05:33 PM
Big ole drought in Texas and I still got the hots for you...toss in something about cows and water tanks, old pickups and lonestar beer and you have a winner.

Only thing I can grow is weeds in the garden and lonely with you gone

Dr. Facebook Fever
09-24-2011, 05:34 PM
Early Hungarian cabinet making.

Ooops nevermind not new... been done by my brothers band.

Kyle DeLexus
09-24-2011, 05:48 PM
I want to go on

Kyle DeLexus
09-24-2011, 05:49 PM
super tight vagina

Kyle DeLexus
09-24-2011, 05:50 PM
for your nttawwt crowd..."cowboys butts drive me nuts"

Okie_Apparition
09-24-2011, 05:59 PM
I went to pick some ripe cantalope from the vine
but from the ground up the rollie pollies were turning them to mushmellons
and when I turned them over I thought of you every time

Baconeater
09-24-2011, 06:01 PM
Wendy meets a draftabulator.

Der Flöprer
09-24-2011, 07:21 PM
My signature move.

Easy 6
09-24-2011, 07:28 PM
The devil never wrote no love song.

I'm stealing that from Garth Brooks, but you could twist it around enough to make it your own.

Kyle DeLexus
09-24-2011, 07:30 PM
BBW Lovers Gallery

Otter
09-24-2011, 07:32 PM
Not trying to be a smart ass or anything Fax but how about a song about breaking up with oxycotten. (is that spelled correctly?)

Some of the best arts in the world came from adveristy.

AustinChief
09-24-2011, 07:36 PM
An idea I had for a country song...

start out with a typical tale of a spurned man whose woman has left him for another man... build it up to the reveal- she is a born again christian who leaves you due to your sinning ways...and the title/chorus/hook... JESUS STOLE MY BABY AWAY!

DO IT!

Der Flöprer
09-24-2011, 07:37 PM
Dry Clean Only.

Der Flöprer
09-24-2011, 07:38 PM
Meat Curtains For Sale.

Der Flöprer
09-24-2011, 07:38 PM
Roast Beef's not always good.

KurtCobain
09-24-2011, 07:39 PM
"I'm 19 and in prison for murder man
she was blabbing and gabbin but i didnt mean to hurt her man
shoulda just left with my ice ream and jurgins can
but now im 19 and in prison for murder man

Der Flöprer
09-24-2011, 07:39 PM
Bowling with Pagans.

Der Flöprer
09-24-2011, 07:40 PM
Flaccid Love.

KurtCobain
09-24-2011, 07:40 PM
Give me hug
buy me a mug
that says give me a tug
before i drown you in the tub

stevieray
09-24-2011, 07:41 PM
three on the tree

Simply Red
09-24-2011, 07:45 PM
We're no strangers to love
You know the rules and so do I
A full commitment's what I'm thinking of
You wouldn't get this from any other guy
I just wanna tell you how I'm feeling
Gotta make you understand

AustinChief
09-24-2011, 07:52 PM
OH OH I have another one!

Walk Off- as in a walk off home run in baseball... that phrase seems ripe for picking!

Simply Red
09-24-2011, 07:54 PM
I'm not sure here, but i'd imagine it SHOULD involve midgets.

Mr. Laz
09-24-2011, 07:57 PM
Skies are crying, I am watching
Catching teardrops in my hands
Only silence, as its ending, like we never had a chance.
Do you have to make me feel like there’s nothing left of me?

You can take everything I have
You can break everything I am
Like I’m made of glass
Like I’m made of paper
Go on and try to tear me down
I will be rising from the ground
Like a skyscraper, like a skyscraper

As the smoke clears
I awaken and untangle you from me
Would it make you feel better to watch me while I bleed
All my windows still are broken but I’m standing on my feet

You can take everything I have
You can break everything I am
Like I’m made of glass
Like I’m made of paper
Go on and try to tear me down
I will be rising from the ground
Like a skyscraper, like a skyscraper

Go run run run I’m gonna stay right here
Watch you disappear yeah
Go run run run yeah it’s a long way down
But I’m closer to the clouds up here

You can take everything I have
You can break everything I am
Like I’m made of glass
Like I’m made of paper
Ohh
Go on and try to tear me down
I will be rising from the ground
Like a skyscraper, like a skyscraper
Like a skyscraper, like a skyscraper
Like a skyscraper

KurtCobain
09-24-2011, 08:00 PM
I just want to pump your dick

I just want to hump your stick

HUMP ME AN OCEAN BABY!!

AustinChief
09-24-2011, 08:05 PM
You would be a genious if you could find a way to write a song about the gheyest non-sport on the planet... Parkour.

booger
09-24-2011, 08:08 PM
Can't move on.

I can't move on
Just can't move on
My dreams are long gone


Pretty weak so far but a start
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Basically when you are told from someone to forget about something and move on with your life because what you want isn't possible at the time or at all. Not about giving up and it being sad but basically telling those that are encouraging you to move on to piss off.
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I know you Love Steve Gaines and even though the originals of LS died before my time i love that stuff. Even a lot of their early work.

Gaines has such a awesome voice. Puts every bit of his soul into it. Versitile too. The blues stuff he did before LS and then his solo work. Got that right is pretty simple but i love it. Great song.

Screaming Gibson's...SG's the Les Pauls, and the Firebird. I dig the old stuff like Roll Gypsy Roll, Was I right or was I wrong, Coming home, and one of my absolute fav's is Am I losing. Ed King's solo...can't tell you how many times i've played that over and over.

Those are some of the songs i just can't get sick of.

Any of that trip your trigger?

booger
09-24-2011, 08:10 PM
three on the tree

I like that.:thumb:

four on the floor!

Frankie
09-24-2011, 08:12 PM
Hi, Planeteers. This is FAX.

I need some help. I have a meeting with BMI on Monday. We're working in the studio today and realized we're a song short.

I need a good hook (one that hasn't been used in the past by anybody else). Please post your song ideas on this here thread thing. I'll check back later and, if I can use the hook and get the song written, I shall give you co-writer credit (we'll work out the details via the PM deal).

Thank you in advance.

FAX

PS: No songs about super large vaginas, please. I already have quite a few of those.

Disclaimers: Sorry if repost.
"The horse of life has been wild, but I got back on it every time."

You work it out yourself. I expect the first million in small denominations.

Simply Red
09-24-2011, 08:14 PM
"The horse of life has been wild, but I got back on it every time."

You work it out yourself. I expect the first million in small denominations.

sounds like country though, all it's missing is a spilled beer

Frankie
09-24-2011, 08:20 PM
sounds like country though, all it's missing is a spilled beer

OMG,... my life is a country song!

Kyle DeLexus
09-24-2011, 08:24 PM
How much free pussy have you pulled.

It'll easily be a hit.

Simply Red
09-24-2011, 08:34 PM
How much free pussy have you pulled.

It'll easily be a hit.

http://i56.tinypic.com/29mlqi1.gif

teedubya
09-24-2011, 08:37 PM
"I'm holdin' on...
from the inside.
Can't find a way...
to get thru my mind.

[RIFF]

I'm holdin' on...
with all my might.
with all my strength
most every night.

[RIFF]

[Chorus-ish]

And it ain't right.
but I get by.

I try to rise and fly.
But these chains keep me tied.
I'm holdin' on....
from the inside.

I'm holdin' on...
and I'm screamin'
Can't breakaway
from the demons.

I'm holdin' on
but I won't last long.
since you've been gone
things turned out wrong."



I thought of this a few days ago, just came to me, when I realized that I hold on to certain things. It's very incomplete.

cdcox
09-24-2011, 08:44 PM
You gotta kick ass before you kick back.

PornChief
09-24-2011, 09:07 PM
i beat my meat beat my meat
G/F used to do it
but not no more
cause she gone vegetarian
la lal al la de da

Ace Gunner
09-24-2011, 09:14 PM
1st verse
work it - work it - work it - hey
work it - work it - work it - hey
work it - work it - work it - hey
work it - work it - work it - hey



chorus
Oooooooooooooooo - yeah - yeah - yeah


2nd verse
work it - work it - work it - hey
work it - work it - work it - hey
work it - work it - work it - hey
work it - work it - work it - hey


guitar outro


(copyright me 2011)

big nasty kcnut
09-24-2011, 09:56 PM
Demon Woman


My love for you is strong but you seem to not get what going on
Your love is gone Yet my love for you is still strong.
Now you're with another man i just can't seem to understand
was i ever part of your plan or just there for the ride

I need you woman by my side So tired of your lies
I need you woman by my side So i won't sit down and cry

Your a demon woman
your a demon woman
your a demon woman
That like to burn my hide.

I know your been sleeping around
giving mens the view of my land
I just can't seem to comprehend
Even thou i had your hands
you were gone to another man land

Now I need you woman by my side So tired of your lies
I need you woman by my side So i won't sit down and cry

Your a demon woman
your a demon woman
your a demon woman
That i'd like be back by my side

Guitar solo

Now I need you woman by my side So tired of your lies
I need you woman by my side So i won't sit down and cry

Your a demon woman
your a demon woman
your a demon woman
I'll be by your side.

Lumpy
09-24-2011, 10:05 PM
"Stop Making Love to My Trombone."

Let me know if you want the lyrics. :D

Nzoner
09-24-2011, 10:17 PM
Doesn't really matter, Mr. Mr. Flopnuts.

Ideally, it would be a Southern Rock type of song featuring loud, fast Les Paul guitars. I feel the need for speed.

FAX

Border Wars

Use the history between the Missouri and Kansas border wars but maybe modernize it up like me a Mizzou boy marrying a Kansas girl or two brothers who don't see eye to eye and it could all come full circle,plus it was recently in the news.

FAX
09-25-2011, 10:40 AM
I'm sorry to say that this experiment didn't work as well as I'd hoped. I blame myself.

It's not that you guys didn't provide some excellent ideas. I'm certain that there are a number of #1 hits snuggled away in this thread thing. However, for whatever reason, nothing seemed to resonate with me.

Thanks anyway. It was worth a try.

FAX

Simply Red
09-25-2011, 10:49 AM
did you like Jim Croce, FAX?

cdcox
09-25-2011, 10:50 AM
I suspect that there is a reason why you can make a living writing songs, and we can't.

FAX
09-25-2011, 10:55 AM
did you like Jim Croce, FAX?

No. For some reason, I hated that guy with every fiber of my being.

I'm more of a blues/rock kind of person ... listening-wise.

FAX

FAX
09-25-2011, 10:57 AM
I suspect that there is a reason why you can make a living writing songs, and we can't.

In theory, this plan will work, Mr. cdcox.

I have gotten many a song idea while listening to a conversation in a bar. Song ideas are everywhere ... even on ChiefsPlanet.

I think maybe I put too much performance pressure on you guys.

FAX

Ace Gunner
09-25-2011, 10:58 AM
I'm sorry to say that this experiment didn't work as well as I'd hoped. I blame myself.

It's not that you guys didn't provide some excellent ideas. I'm certain that there are a number of #1 hits snuggled away in this thread thing. However, for whatever reason, nothing seemed to resonate with me.

Thanks anyway. It was worth a try.

FAX

what about a southern style r/b feel. I can offer a finished piece with no vocal you might find easy.

Simply Red
09-25-2011, 11:00 AM
Reverend Horton Heat!

FAX
09-25-2011, 11:01 AM
what about a southern style r/b feel. I can offer a finished piece with no vocal you might find easy.

Thanks for the offer, Mr. chiefsfootballfan.

I'm good with the music part, though. I was just looking for a hook idea I could build around.

It's too late now, though. I have a meeting on Monday and don't have time to develop anything else. Some other day, perhaps.

FAX

Dr. Facebook Fever
09-25-2011, 11:03 AM
I'm sorry to say that this experiment didn't work as well as I'd hoped. I blame myself.

It's not that you guys didn't provide some excellent ideas. I'm certain that there are a number of #1 hits snuggled away in this thread thing. However, for whatever reason, nothing seemed to resonate with me.

Thanks anyway. It was worth a try.

FAX

LMAO

Now sure why that made me laugh so hard

Simply Red
09-25-2011, 11:59 AM
I'm sorry to say that this experiment didn't work as well as I'd hoped. I blame myself.

It's not that you guys didn't provide some excellent ideas. I'm certain that there are a number of #1 hits snuggled away in this thread thing. However, for whatever reason, nothing seemed to resonate with me.

Thanks anyway. It was worth a try.

FAX

I. JUST. THOUGHT OF ONE!

"There's a hole in my heart that can only be filled by YOU!"

teedubya
09-25-2011, 12:10 PM
You gotta kick ass before you kick back.

I liked this one. It could be built into something.

Too many lazy slackers out there... who'd rather slack then get to work.

Everyone wants shit handed to them. Just like FAX in this thread!

**** FAX, he don't know SHIT!! :p

Ace Gunner
09-25-2011, 12:10 PM
Thanks for the offer, Mr. chiefsfootballfan.

I'm good with the music part, though. I was just looking for a hook idea I could build around.

It's too late now, though. I have a meeting on Monday and don't have time to develop anything else. Some other day, perhaps.

FAX

I write in several genres, though drivin' southern rock is rare for me. You may contact me anytime.

FAX
09-25-2011, 12:13 PM
I write in several genres, though drivin' southern rock is rare for me. You may contact me anytime.

If you like that kind of music, I have a band for you to check out ... Nashville blues/rock ... likely unknown to most people. The band is called "Hundred Seventy Split", although it's basically just Leo Lyons, Joe Gooch, and a drummer.

FAX

Simply Red
09-25-2011, 12:15 PM
If you like that kind of music, I have a band for you to check out ... Nashville blues/rock ... likely unknown to most people. The band is called "Hundred Seventy Split", although it's basically just Leo Lyons, Joe Gooch, and a drummer.

FAX

Mighty Mighty Bosstones can't be denied

Chiefshrink
09-25-2011, 12:20 PM
With what is happening to our country and how the elites on both sides of the aisle are basically sh**ting on all of us and selling us hard working Americans out to the world, I say let's continue the patriotism:thumb:
I take it you live in songwriting heaven and among true blue patriots, I would think this would go over very well.

Try to do something with these phrases if you could Mr.FAX. But I must tell you if you get this song to go big and you use any of my phrases I want royalties and credit!!! I trust that an SEK bro like you would take care of another SEK bro:thumb:


"Flippin us the bird and callin us turds"


"At the end of the day "We The People" RULE OUR WAAAAAAY"!


Song would be called very simply: "We The People".