I have to agree. show me where there is an extra comma anywhere. I just read it over and didn't see any extra commas.

Ok, I see a couple in quotations that probably shouldn't be there. Not really worth pointing out though.

Commas are allowed before the word and, as it is a conjunction.

your mom is a conjunction

Either way, it seems like extreme grammar-nazi territory to me.

your mom is a grammar.

:spock: That doesn't even make sense.

That's cuz sofa boinks grammars for fun.

Yeah, you'll think that!

n00b humor over your head.

Tick Tock

shhhh!

It takes a long time to find out where he can trim points off our score to **** us.

That's what I was thinking. Lumpy is probably hanging over his shoulder and coaching him on what kinds of things to count off for.

Probably?

Of course she is.


If there even really IS a Gonzo.

My evaluation of the n00bs story:

You guys really came through on this one. I am impressed at your teamwork.

Artwork:

This cover was something else. Just a great job:

http://i99.photobucket.com/albums/l281/erclsr/Cover.jpg

However,
This pic damn near made me piss myself:

http://i99.photobucket.com/albums/l2...ebowmosque.jpg

Each picture was conducive to the story but the back cover was fairly 'Meh' however, since the back cover is just a bonus, it doesn't count against you.

Total points for Artwork:
24

Creativity
You guys definitely put some real effort into this. I almost felt sorry for poor Mr. Teebow... It was a good story. You really stuck with the whole "Allah" thing throughout the story. It was fluid and definitely held my attention. It did seem to wander a little off and on with the fat whores and beastiallity but all in all a great story. I enjoyed it and it was very creative.

Total points for Creativity:
22


Spelling and Punctuation:

3 Errors as well:

I believe Crack Whore and Shit Bird are two words or can by hyphenated...
It's I told you so's, not I told you sos.

Total for punctuation and spelling:
22 Points


Comedic Value:
I have to say, pretty damn funny story, guys... Like I stated earlier, it wandered a little but as a whole, it was a great effort. I really liked how you painted the city of Denver as a whole. That warmed my heart. My favorite line?
LMAO

Great job guys, very creative and funny. I really enjoyed it.

Total Points for comedic value:
21


Total points:
89



We'll see what the other judges have to say but IMHO you guys really did well. Both teams did, actually. However, I think you guys took a few more 'Artistic Liberties' than the Vets on this one and were a little more creative.

Good job to both teams, (especially on the artwork).
Thanks for playing!