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Originally Posted by Jenson71
A sentence from The New Yorker:
"The age of atomic energy could be said to have begun, literally, with the wave of a wand."
I think the sentence sounds better like this:
"One could [or: might] say the age of atomic energy began, literally, with the wave of a wand."
Is my sentence better than The New Yorker's?
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Your sentence is better. I would tighten it up even more and say:
The age of atomic energy began, literally, with the wave of a wand.