Also might want to capitalize law when you say Pettlon Law.

whoops!

Well done. I like the way your sourced your points with concrete examples. Only minor change that I might consider is changing the "loins of Lucifer" comment. That might detract from your argument for some readers. Very minor. Overall, you did an excellent job. A+

<blockquote class="twitter-tweet"><p lang="en" dir="ltr">Remember last week, when the NFL offices were pretty much shut down? Not the case today. This is the second punishment handed down to players today ... <a href="https://t.co/d8beXvcEsN">https://t.co/d8beXvcEsN</a></p>&mdash; Jeff Rosen (@jeff_rosen88) <a href="https://twitter.com/jeff_rosen88/status/1149770958330355712?ref_src=twsrc%5Etfw">July 12, 2019</a></blockquote> <script async src="https://platform.twitter.com/widgets.js" charset="utf-8"></script>

This is one smug asshole

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Highlighted should be "its". Or maybe even "their".

It's funny. No.

I'm going live at 3:30. I bet I don't get ratio'd like this:

https://i.imgur.com/zQzq3b0.png

This one is pretty harmless, but whatever:

At almost every turn, The Star has decried anything that might fly in the face of their initial reports, which we now know, for a fact, were the result of an attempt by Crystal Espinal to frame Tyreek Hill for a crime.

Aside from your use of the word fact here, which is dubious on its own, I would remove the comma between know and for. “Which we now know for a fact” is the clause.

Very good.

And it's pretty much fact that she framed him. She admitted to making shit up per 810.

Quotes?

Must have missed these comments.

http://www.810whb.com/2019/06/10/whb...reak-sons-arm/

Espinal, according to sources, asked a third party to call authorities and tell them that Hill was responsible for the boy’s injury.

I’m not saying I disagree, I just think it’s arguable, which you confirm when you say it’s “pretty much fact”.

Next edit:

But it was Espinal who weaponized a son against his father. Imagine what might have been published if the reverse had been true

No punctuation at the end of the 2nd sentence.

Very good. Keep em coming.

Doesn't fit the overall tone to my ear. But like I said, minor issue. Would be nice to get 4 or 5 more entries from others. Strength in numbers. And for anyone that didn't read Clay's piece, you can submit your outrage :D here:

[links are live for your convenience]

Tony Berg, the President and Publisher of the KC Star.
[email protected]
[email protected]

Dan Schaub, Corporate Director of Audience Development at McClatchy.
[email protected].

Kevin McClatchy, Chairman of McClatchy.
[email protected]
[email protected].

To voice your concern about what media are allowed access to the Chiefs:
[email protected]

@Ted_Crews

Standard journalism in clown world.

by the way, easier to just post a screenshot

https://i.imgur.com/Y2eHmcJ.png