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Originally Posted by Hammock Parties
actually i need to say "if" not "when" in all those
got it
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I would still be careful there. The structure of the sentence is:
If you don’t trust a paper when they A, B, or C, then changes are necessary.
I added the “then” to make it a more proper if/then. Looking at it in that structure, you see why you don’t need the first comma. In my previous edit, I combined B and C into a new clause essentially saying “they attack us yet can’t even get their own shit straight”. It’s stylistic for sure. I hate a lot of commas.