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Take a Chill Pill
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The Maintenance Guy
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Ok, I see a couple in quotations that probably shouldn't be there. Not really worth pointing out though.
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Take a Chill Pill
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Commas are allowed before the word and, as it is a conjunction.
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Hey Loochy, I'm hooome!
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your mom is a conjunction
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The Maintenance Guy
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Either way, it seems like extreme grammar-nazi territory to me.
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Bump it
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The Maintenance Guy
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Cool as a Cucumber
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That's cuz sofa boinks grammars for fun.
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Bump it
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Tip of the hat LIV Champs
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Bump it
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Hey Loochy, I'm hooome!
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That's what I was thinking. Lumpy is probably hanging over his shoulder and coaching him on what kinds of things to count off for.
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Bump it
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My evaluation of the n00bs story:
You guys really came through on this one. I am impressed at your teamwork. Artwork: This cover was something else. Just a great job: ![]() However, This pic damn near made me piss myself: ![]() Each picture was conducive to the story but the back cover was fairly 'Meh' however, since the back cover is just a bonus, it doesn't count against you. Total points for Artwork: 24 Creativity You guys definitely put some real effort into this. I almost felt sorry for poor Mr. Teebow... It was a good story. You really stuck with the whole "Allah" thing throughout the story. It was fluid and definitely held my attention. It did seem to wander a little off and on with the fat whores and beastiallity but all in all a great story. I enjoyed it and it was very creative. Total points for Creativity: 22 Spelling and Punctuation: 3 Errors as well: I believe Crack Whore and Shit Bird are two words or can by hyphenated... It's I told you so's, not I told you sos. Total for punctuation and spelling: 22 Points Comedic Value: I have to say, pretty damn funny story, guys... Like I stated earlier, it wandered a little but as a whole, it was a great effort. I really liked how you painted the city of Denver as a whole. That warmed my heart. My favorite line? Quote:
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